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Post by Ninmast on Dec 27, 2009 0:26:08 GMT -5
Yes, because that's what our government does. Shrugs and quietly ignores things. I wanna move to whatever alternate reality you're living in.
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zandyne
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This is NOT Zetsu. DX
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Post by zandyne on Dec 27, 2009 4:25:57 GMT -5
Ok, wall of text time, I am so very sorry. On the question of escaping Incendia; yes, that is why they managed to become a race. By no means was Aloysius the only one who really didn't want to be there, nor was he the only one with enough sense to understand that you can't trust your welfare to a demon. As for the morale, well, I think you can begin to see why Flavros didn't exactly win that war. I must point out that the more you try to clarify the more holes it seems to tear open along the way. Since you have now stated that there are more Incendia which have escaped, how have they gone unnoticed by the world? Once again, not everyone is careful or discreet. As for Flavs tactical loss of war, I was referring to the personality clash that such actions present. On one hand he is going through the trouble of singling out a noble to the point of burning down his whole town, and then giving him magical self-generating powers and immortality? You have tried to justify the "great powers" as being something that boosts soldier morale for battle success, which is true to an extent (but not the type of demon you have presented, aka one who uses psychology to meet his ends, not force). You state several times that Flavs is an arrogant, if not proud demon who is intimidating enough to control an immortal, pyrokentic army of super humans, and wastes YEARS discreetly picking up Aloy yet takes some significantly shorter time to convert him to a demon. Lack of planning is one thing but one who is imperious does not bide his time to gather a single underling that can be lumped in with the rest of the army, no matter how you cut it. If he was "cunning" enough to waste his time he'd be "cunning" enough to sabotage his troops should the worst happen. At the same time if he is ruthless enough to commit evil regardless of cooperation yet not enough to ultimately crush his troops into utterly loyal pawns, there is a serious lapse in the character of this so-called demon lord. On the issue of exactly how the power keeps on generating, I would say that it is almost a biological process; it is as much a part of Manderscheid as an arm or a foot. Were he to become exhausted, he would no longer be able to do much of anything fire-related, just as he would probably have quite a lot of trouble running around or bench pressing the person who beat him up badly enough to lead to exhaustion. On the other hand, if he keeps himself well-fed and rested, flaming exertions cause no particular trouble, nor would he have any trouble exacting angry vengeance on the cad who beat him up previously. You say this, yet I read nothing of the undernourishment and/or fatigue = lack of powers listed in his weaknesses. I'd recommend you include it when you get the chance. Now, does this mean that he requires the same energy as back when he was a human? Since you have described it as a biological process, what else has changed? The only "drawback" I read is "frozen in time," does he require a special mineral, drink, food or otherwise? While you do not have to specifically adhere to such standards it is clear that he has gained these changes unnaturally, so it is only logical he would have to compensate for them in some manner that varies from his usual "human living." As for day-to-day living, he had to be pretty migratory. While the U.S. labor laws actually do allow for work at his apparent age, (14 for non-agricultural work, though limited, only outside of school hours, and only if the legislators deem it nonhazardous to their health), and jumping into the foster program keeps him from having to worry about accidentally lighting the theoretical trash can he would be bumming in on fire, that whole "mandatory schooling" thing becomes rather troublesome; he can generally just kind of pretend his way through high school, but people start getting suspicious when an 18 year old looks and sounds perfectly identical to his 14 year old iteration, especially since that whole 'puberty' thing is supposed to happen. Therefore, he usually has to skip town shortly after high school graduation, and get far enough away that the local constabulary can't rope him back and ask any uncomfortable questions. If he is going to school that would only expose him wouldn't it? And how would he progress through his foster homes? His foster parents would all have to be very, very unobservant to not notice that after 4 years the kid hasn't changed at all and then he "disappears"? Does he change his name each time as well? *I would actually suspect an urban legend to be generated from this.... Also, once again consider that a 14 year old who never gets sick and who never gets hurt, especially from the time he returned to earth, how suspicious that is. And as well as he passes through to modern days that he is closer to being discovered. Even if he manages to be a "ghost child" his foster family would at some point take him to a doctor or some such and possibly notice that little Aloy is not at all normal given the dramatic biological changes in him. (Especially if for 4 years he never grows, if any family didn't raise brows at that...) *I also cannot imagine any person enjoying reliving their high school years and drama infinitely. Most people can't even stand the first and only time... Now, doing this for long enough would eventually attract the attention of the U.S. government(it doesn't do too well when a few dozen people of the same name and appearance have, over time, disappeared all over the place, at roughly the same time in their lives), but I would argue, given the number of specially able people that the country has employed, as well as the fact that this particular special person seems content not to do anything particularly dangerous, that aforementioned government could decide to just shrug and quietly ignore it. If he was the ONLY one and maybe aged differently or had different knowledge, perhaps it could slide, but you have mentioned that other Incendia exist, any of which could cause trouble and draw attention. And of course as Aloy progresses to the modern years, people would begin to notice this immortal child that flits from home to home and persists in several different high school year books and records, assuming he could milk all four years for their worth each time. Also they would care! If a string of families file missing reports for the same missing person, what then? Only two would have to rub their brain cells together before the witch-hunt for Aloy would start.
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shinaobi
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Oh yeah.
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Post by shinaobi on Dec 27, 2009 12:27:35 GMT -5
:<
Welp, I know when I'm beaten; I'll do a rewrite, though I might wait a bit so I can come back clear-minded.
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Post by Ninmast on Dec 27, 2009 13:39:52 GMT -5
You have a good start, Shin. You just have some fine-tuning to do.
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