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Post by Toriji on Feb 27, 2008 15:40:07 GMT -5
Name: Hanakaze Ishida
Age: 19
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Alignment: Lawful good
Power Level: High- tier low
Timeline: Post- Apocalyptic Future
Appearance: ~Body- Thin ~Hair- Light Brown ~Eyes- Gray ~Height- 5'2'' ~Weight- 105 ~Clothes- She wears short leather pants and a loose fittind halter top. Over the shirt, she wears a brown cloth jacket.
Personality: She is a non- stop cheerful person, annoying in fact. She has quite a short fuse and is likely to retaliate without thinking. She is overly- hyper and always doing something.
History: She lived in a village that had been plagued by a group of vicious Driders. The men of the village were always on patrol and never had time to tend to their families, except for her father. he was injured while guarding the village and was forced to stay at home with the women and children. Her father decided to train her as an archer since he was disabled so. He took her under his wing like most fathers only did for their sons. She trained hard for nine years until she finally stood up to his standards as a fighter. She soon after left the village to find work as a mercenary. After a short period, a mercenary group found her and decided to let her work for them. She now sends money to her village from the work she does.
Powers: She has no powers, but a trained marksmanship eye.
Weakness:she has no specific weaknesses, but she is still human.
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shinaobi
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Oh yeah.
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Post by shinaobi on Feb 27, 2008 18:45:32 GMT -5
I like it, but I want more detail. She seems like she could be a really good concept, but she doesn't have much meat on her bones.
Like, if this is post apocalyptic, why doesn't she have guns? Weapons tend to survive holocausts. It's just the people and the societies that don't. And, who taught her dad archery? Did the Driders ever go away? How was her father injured? Did it kill him later on in his life? Was he just stuck to a wheelchair? Why were the Driders plaguing the village?
I just think there should be more.
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Post by Toriji on Feb 29, 2008 8:12:50 GMT -5
Yes intedned to edit the rest in, but I was at school and the bell to leave was about to ring. I'll edit it when i have a little more time.
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