Michael Eden, Chosen Among the Chosen

[The Strategist]

I am following the character guides written by True Blue and Ninmast to construct my profile.

Name: Michael Eden

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Race: Human

Faction: Chosen Ones

Alignment: True Lawful

Power Level: Medium tier medium

Timeline: Modern/ Near Future

Appearance:

• Hair: Black, worn long and in a ponytail
  
• Eyes: Blue
  
• Skin: White
  
• Build: Fit
  
• Attire: White monk garb (during public hours, when he wants to be known), brown hood when moving around in secret
  
• Height: 6’1
  

Appearance (Ninmast Style): He wears his black hair long and messy, and often ties it into a ponytail. He is a fit man, without being too muscular. He wears a white monk garb when he wants to be known in public, and a brown hood when moving around in secret.

Personality: Kind, cares for those who are loyal to him, and is ferocious and commanding if conflict arises. He is a natural pacifist, and he’s secretive about his private life, and what happens when he’s away from the public eyes.

History: In a world torn by war, old religions were decimated and wars were fought over material ideals and possessions. The Chosen Ones rose up around one Michael Eden, who claims that God has spoken to him and told him to lead his followers to a peaceful world. It is said that Michael Eden was a Mage who abandoned his faction’s ungodly ways and instead focused on the spiritual aspect of things. He believes that the only weapons they truly require are their faith and their spirits. All other weapons are means to an end, and should only be used as a last resort. His views, and inherently the views of his faction, sees the Global Forces as warmongers, the Mages as ungodly, the Corrupted as abandoned by God and all other factions as misguided men and women who need guidance to the one true beacon of light.

Powers: Michael Eden’s powers are those of light. His faith fuels his powers. He can use it offensively, but never had. He focuses on channeling light to heal and guide those who need his aid. In combat, his deadliest tools are the strengths of his loyal followers and allies.

Weapons: He has no weapons, except for a staff he occasionally carries when in public. The staff is known as the Sacred Staff of Order.

Weakness: Michael Eden is ultimately human, and is subject to any and every weakness that could affect a human being.

[zandyne]

I know it's hard to describe a character who may follow a strict religious regime or be simple in appearance but you could use a few more details overall regardless of the "style" you picked for describing. What does his face look like? Does he have a blank expression wherever he goes? Does he have a certain 'air' about him? What does this monk garb look like? If it's a staple or loosely based off a certain pre-existing monk attire, describe that. Also how is he fit despite being a pacifist? I would like to hear why he insists on a physical regimen if he is a pacifist. It's sorry to say, but his current appearance is a bit too frugal to be even called frugal at this point.

How is he a pacifist yet ferocious and commanding, how is he passive and to what extent? Would there be any case that he would lose sight of this trait? Describe or give an example of how he would deal with "such a conflict." Giving or implying reasons as to how his personality came about or whatever quirks he might have will create a stronger and more unique character.

His "powers" are fine but perhaps you should indicate the intensity and requirements and such of what his powers can do, they're a bit vague. Revealing the limitations of a power doesn't necessarily make it weak, it merely states the limitations, it's up to the creator/player's wits to use them effectively. Even moreso since you plan on passing him off as a mid-tier medium.

In terms of weakness, I would like to assume he has a more diverse weakness than just being mortal. How about nonphysical weaknesses? And even then the "average human" has unique weaknesses in on themselves.

[Beanybag]

Enigma...wow. Try the approach that Zandyne took next time, EAB is about improvement after all and I don't want to scare away active members. >.>

[Kainus Maximus]

Calm the hell down Enigma, I don't care how much you make you convince yourself that you are offended, that is not the way we handle things around here and you should know that.

[EJP]

Nov 10, 2008 16:17:52 GMT -5 Enigma said:

I've had it with your dumb ass. I can't keep to my own any longer. Why the fuck are you even here? Really? You make these half assed characters, and pretend to be the smart shit around here? No. No. No. No. This is the most pathetic thing i've seen since.. well? I don't even know.

Your description? What in the hell is that? A couple lines? Are you fucking serious? Get real. If you were to do this in reality? You'd get the shit kicked out of you.

OY! And what makes you all high and mighty ey? So the dude is not good at decription. Its called learning and it takes time. Everyone has different level of details when it comes to certain things. Leave the Strategist alone, thus far he hasn't done anything wrong, unlike yourself to my knowledge.

[Ninmast]

Zandyne pretty much covered everything I was going to bring up about this character. Also, an elaboration on the event that apparently changed his life would also be nice. And is there anything special about his staff or is it just ceremonial? What else does he wear when he's trying to go unnoticed besides just a brown hood? And I believe the alignment you're thinking of is Lawful Neutral. True Lawful would mean Lawful Lawful, as True Neutral is the place where both neutrals, that of Law and Chaos and that of Good and Evil, cross. There is no such intersection between Lawful and Lawful, as there's only one.

[The Strategist]

First off, a thanks to whoever deleted the offending post before I could see it.

Second, I have posted this profile quickly after my previous post on Battleworld, in which he revealed himself. I will edit the post soon and make the appropriate changes.

When he does not want to be recognized, he wears different outfits that disguise him. I will make that more clear in the edit. He isn't constrained to a small wardrobe.