Void Lancer

[LotusBlackfire]

Name: Void Lancer

Age: Human age 27, died then got cyborgnetics and now toal age is 42

Gender: Male/Cyborg

Race: Human/Cyborg

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Power Level: 7

Timeline: Modern

Appearance: Stands at 7'4 weighing in at 598lbs, he looks like a towering hulk with a massive body. Usually wears large coats or giant pieces of cloth to cover his enormous stature, He can change certain facial features but usually keeps them hidden and is often seen as bald.

Personality: Almost no personality remains, just logic, he is sent information through an unknown network that he is apart of like a super wifi connection he is always apart of it. He is able to act like anyone to gain the trust of people so he may fullfill his objective

History: Void used to be a very normal person, until he died, and a weapons engineering company worked with a cyborgnetics company and they compiled their tech together to create an unstoppable walking arsenal of weapons

Powers: Cyborgnetics that replaced many of his organs and body parts, on the outside appears to be a large man, but on the inside he is mainly metal and alloys. Can produce many weapons from his arms and body, his arsenal includes, laser cannons, plasma cannons, heavy artilery machine guns, magnetically accelerated weaponry, Rockets, Flamers, Chainblades, Automatic guns, and Heat weapons.

Equipment: Everything inside of him

Weakness: Certain weapons can overheat and cause other weapons to cease function temporarily

[shinaobi]

......Work harder please. Work harder.

[LotusBlackfire]

on what? you need to be a bit more specific

[shinaobi]

Everything. Biography's a sentence, minus period, personality's functionally non-existent, your weakness isn't a weakness at all, and your powers section is so vague that you'll probably spend all your time turning every orifice of the guy into rocket launchers and then crying foul when people call you on it.

[LotusBlackfire]

How is his weakness not a weakness? All he is is a bunch of heavy weaponry, if his weapons go out thats a huge thing that could get him destroyed

[shinaobi]

No. It is not. Considering the fact that his arsenal isn't defined in any way, shape or form, I honestly expect to see him start shooting daggers from his obviously massive pecs the instant someone brings up the issue of overheating.

And you're not Chaotic Neutral when you take orders from an organization.

[LotusBlackfire]

How about you actually read the powers whole paragraph, you'll notice it lists his arsenal, and as for his alignment, his alignment is lined up with the organizations

[EJP]

I thought you gave up on RPing here Lotus? No, I'm not saying your not welcomed here or anything, just thought that you gave up on it. I'm curious as to just why you made this character honestly. Anyway, I don't think this character could work in his current state, even more so if he is so post to be modern. This character, in my opinion would work better in a future setting. Even so, this character still needs some work. First off, listing weapons he can made seems like it would fit more into weapons/equipment. But even if you list them as power or weapons/equipment, you need to go further into detail about them. Just listing stuff he can turn his body into, isn't going to cut it. 2nd, towering hulk, just how is a towering hulk? Is he like Andrea the giant, lou ferrigno, the exploding arms guy, Hulk Hogan, or like the comic book character the Hulk? Giving point of refferance would really help us understand how big this guy is. 3rd, this guy has a wifi link, could hacking into it or cutting off his signal be a weakness? It would be a bad idea if you were to say it was an unstoppable super statalite aided wifi. To my knowledge, wifi siginals are easily blockable. 4th, how is he a cyborg? Does he have a human brain of some kind? Human organs? Human skin? What makes him a cyborg? To myknowledge, to be considered a cyborg, you must have living human tissuse of some kind and if you don't, your some other kind of robo person. Lastly, your going to have to expand his history and not just have it be one sentence if you expect anyone to understand this character. So he's a heavily armed cyborg who is appartly working for someone. What does he do? Is his a $5 billion pooper scooper, an assassin, a crime fighter, a guard dog, a painter, fire fighter, or just walking tank in a glass case with a sign "Break in the event of war!"?

[Ninmast]

Everybody chill out. There's not nearly as much wrong with this profile and EJP and Shinaobi, you're both being over the top here. It is possible for him to be in a modern campaign. Look at other androids, such as H.A.C.S. It will require explaining, however, and the history could use some expanding, but it tells us the basics. The only thing that I would say absolutely needs clarification is the unit's physical capabilities, like strength and toughness, as those aren't actually given.

So let's lay off of Lotus, give the poor man some breathing room and a welcome back and put away our pitchforks, 'kay?

[LotusBlackfire]

wow ninmast and to a smaller extent EJP being the voice of reason when it comes to something involving me? Now im worried.

Well i'll start by answering EJPs questions, I never gave up roleplaying here, just kinda stopped cause of a few things related to the site and alot of things not related to the site. As for making the character i had him brewing in me for along time and he needed to get out. I do plan on giving discriptions about the weapons into further detail but im still working on that part. As for the towering hulk, by definition a hulk is just something big and brawly basically, thats what i meant after all he is over 7 feet tall. His wifi isnt really wifi, its something more sophisticated but for the sake of people being able to relate to it i said wifi. The cyborg thing relates to his body still being made up of alot of human tissue, the brain, the altered skin, he even still has organs. As for the history its very simple, hes just a cyborg that is a walking weapon, his past is insignificant, it no longer has a meaning.

Now i do agree with ninmast (dear god did i actually say that >.>) the strength and toughness need to be listed but im trying to determine what would be associated wtih his stature and size, but i am still working on this and dealing with real life situations.