Dredge and Sig

[The Crow]

Name: Dredge

Age: 150 (20)

Gender: Male

Race: Elf- Dhe'nar

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Power Level: 5

Time line: Medieval

Appearance: Blue hair, Violet eyes, Tan, Athletic build, 6'5", 150 pounds, Black pants with leg cloak over them, Gold armbands and necklaces, Multi-ringed gold bracelets, Black sleeveless shirt

Personality: Quite, Serious

History: An orphan since the age of 10, Dredge has been living homeless with no thoughts other than revenge. He spent 90 years training himself in various fields. He tracked them down, and mercilessly killed the bandits who had made him an orphan. To his surprise, they were really his family, including his parents. He went insane after that and does not remember much. 20 years ago he became a Jack-of-all-Trades and set out to see the world. 10 years ago he met a man who played heavy on hypnotism. 5 years ago he managed to free himself from the man. Yesterday he came back to his home city.
After staying with the man and being subjected to his torture, Sig came and slowly took control. She was vicious and uncaring. She soon managed to get hold of a deck of cards. Infusing them with dark magic she slaughtered the hypnotist. She ran away, and when Dredge took over, she became carefree and happy. She tends to take over when drinking or Dredge is about to die. She is the spirit of a dead Dhe'nar. She possessed him and has fallen in love with the man. She is trying to find a suitable host to be with him forever.

Powers: Weather resistance, Heightened strength and defense, Better senses, More tuned to magic, Extremely athletic, Great tracking skills, Good assassin skills, Okay archer and medic, Average mage, Skilled fighter
Weapons: Crocodile Dundee knife in boot, Hidden throwing knives hidden in sleeves, Katana on back

Weakness: Human deaths, except for aging; Telekinesis


Name: Sig

Age: 150 (20)

Gender: Female / Male

Race: Elf- Dhe'nar

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Power Level: 6

Time line: Medieval

Appearance: Silver hair, Scarlet eyes, Tan, Athletic build, 6'5", 150 pounds, Black pants with leg cloak over them, Gold armbands and necklaces, Multi-ringed gold bracelets, Black sleeveless shirt

Personality: Happy go lucky, If in a fight then very scary

History: See Dredge

Powers: Dark Magic, Everything about Dredge is increased, Ignores Pain

Weapons: A deck of cards infused with black magic. Used like daggers.

Weakness: Human deaths, except for aging; Telekinesis

Rough Idea of clothes- i176.photobucket.com/albums/w173/dominigregor/lestat.jpg

[The Silent Orator]

I'll have to do some research on the race through yahoo later... for now I'll ask some questions that might have been in the race description. >.>

First of all, I don't think you specified a gender to your character. However, with the pronouns you used, as well as the history, I assume Dredge and Sig are male or female. Unless when Dredge, as a male, transforms into a female when he/she turns into Sig... eh, I personally think that should be elaborated just a tiny bit more. I'm confused whether these two are the same character, or just transformations with different names, or whether it's a split personality disorder or something.

I don't know if it's needed, but it's a good idea to have some kind of weakness section to your character. It might be well-known to some people, but I know next to nothing about virturally any non-human race in the D&D world, or any other world.

What does Sig's deck of cards do? Maybe an example of some sort would be nice.

I don't know about what others say, and I await being corrected or corrobated on this, but people who are mentally unstable usually aren't true neutral. It depends on the instability.



Umm, aside from those concerns, the profile's okay IMO.

[Enigma]

It seems... rather.. short... and.. the attacks are rather.. out of the class of a battle mage. Assassin abilities for a battle mage? Pointless. And I don't see a power level.

[The Crow]

to enigma- that why i asked for help, and as a battle mage, he would use magic and weapons right? katana throwing stars big knife.... sounds like killing objects to me, and knife and stars wuld be assassin weaps cause they are easy to use in killing quietly.

to flamebrain- it states dredge as a guy in the history, and the deck is like.... cards that cut stuff..... and sig is the spirit of a dead dhe'nar chick. and that is why i asked, because sharp pointy objects is a simple known weakness to most things.

[CHANGEME]

*scratches head* Is it okay if I say that the profile looks like you put zero effort into it? Like, you scribbled down some train of thought and posted it without reading it twice. I mean, that's just how it looks, not saying that you did.

#1- Are Dredge and Sig separate characters? If they can function independently of each other, they are, and each need their own full-length profiles.

#2- Eh. Sounds more Chaotic Neutral to me. Y'know, the whole "killing" thing.

#3- The history. I'm sorry, sweetie, but... You're joking, right? You don't need my help to see that there's more than a few blank spots in there. Please round it out a bit, use proper grammar, and maybe get a beta reader. ^_^;

#4- Just wondering: Do "Dhe'nar" not have last names? Howcome he can live to be 150?

Stuff you're missing:
-Timeline. I can't tell if this character is modern or medieval. The 'leg cloak' threw me off. Is that a fancy way to say 'skirt'?
-Power Level ... I can't tell. S'all jumbly. Could he beat an average Power Ranger? That's the Medium-Tier Medium line I judge all characters by. I believe Ninmast has a guide up, read that and see if it helps you.
-Gender Dredge is a guy and Sig is a girl, yes? Please put it in there.
-Personality If there's one in there I don't see it. Please describe every aspect of your character's personality in minute detail.
-Weaknesses Come on. Aaaaaadd sooooome.

[Ninmast]

Short and sweet, use the character sheet, Domini. Also, for race, put Elf - Dhe'nar so that people know it is a branch of elves. Do the same thing for any sub-race or sub-category. You put the main race and then the name of where they fall. A merchant Edenite would be marked Edenite - Civilian, for instance.

EDIT: And on an unofficial note, you can't sneak one past me. Instead of Bass, this Sig is so TOTALLY Spyder. ;D

[The Crow]

@ Ninmast- Huh? Sig is spyder?

@ TrueBlue- nah i just copy and pasted a concept i had done a while ago. i have a lot of these, and i did not have time to edit it to character sheet format

#1- put in race as elf-dhe'nar

#2- put in sig female ghost, dredge male elf

#3 figure out a weakness other than normal things that would kill someone

#4 put in he is chaotic nuetral

#5 put in personality

#6 get your help on power level and timeline like i asked

is that all?

[The Silent Orator]

Perhaps work on the history a bit more. If you wish, I can help you with the profile, as far as beta reading, and perhaps elaboration can go. I don't have YIM though, so, we might have to do this through PM's if you're interested.

[The Crow]

I am up to it. I dont know which perosn I use half the time though. I have at least 10 variations for each perosn lol... anyway yeah pm me and help me out

[CHANGEME]

Ah, variations. The bane of our efforts at self control. Can't have too much fun, you know.

If you have trouble with making too many character variations, try developing the variations into a whole new, different character. That's the only way I control mine.

[Ninmast]

Which is why she only has three. =P

Please, Domini, use the character sheet found in this guide. This is the required format for the forum and can make sure everything is there and in the right place. Until that's done, there's far too much shuffling and sorting to do to really clear out what the power level and time period would be.

By the way, what I meant by Spyder is that the cards and all, that's the way Spyder fights from Megaman X: Command Mission.

[The Crow]

oh. i was actually getting the idea from hunterxhunter evil clowns killing with joker cards and stuff but yeah, ill take the ime and change it to the proper format..... do i need to do 2 of tem because of sig or no?

[Ninmast]

They can both go in this thread, but they each need complete profiles. For Sig's history, though, you can just say, "See Dredge's History."

[The Crow]

Okay, I think I fixed it. I still need a little help though.

[Ninmast]

Power Level is probably 5 for Dredge and 6 for Sig. Judging from the outfit (and the fact that nobody would go around dressed like that in a modern environment) and the fact that you used the word bandits, as opposed to robbers, thieves or crooks, I'd say that the odds are good that this is a medieval character.